You Be the English Teacher
Take a look at this newspaper lead from the Deseret News. It’s an innocuous article about one of the (increasingly commen?) modesty fashion shows in LDS circles.
But this sentence is truly a gem. Examine it logically, culturally, rhetorically, symbolically . . . can you improve upon it?
“When Kelsey Hiskey walked down the runway last week dressed in her white, ruffled wedding dress with her fiance, Jared Glenn, the point of the faith-based fashion show was clear: when young women wear modest attire through their teen years, they are creating a pathway to their church’s temple marriage.”
Okay, I’m done being irreverent. Back to correcting papers.
P.P.S. For a discussion about modesty fashion shows gone astray, check out this post at MMW.